Dedicated to:
Gulzar Saab
and to all guys wih a computer screen who are the inspiration behind this piece
कल रात तुम्हारे online आने का इंतज़ार करता रहा
बोझिल आँखें तुम्हारी बत्ती के green होने की आस देखती रहीं
बात तो वैसे कुछ ख़ास नहीं थी
पार बात तो फ़िर भी करनी थी
दिन कैसे बीता, जब चोट लगी -- क्यों हँसा,
यही सब कहनी थी
दो बार "thr" भी मारा, सोचा कहीं "always-idle" तो नहीं
कोई reply नहीं आया तो सोचा की अब यही सही
शायद आज तुम्हारा mood नहीं था
४ बजे वाला कोहरा भी घिर आया था
मैं आँखें मूँद नींद का इंतज़ार करता रहा
कल रात तुम्हारे online आने का इंतज़ार करता रहा
इन बोझिल आंखों को तुमसे chat करने की आदत सी हो गई है.
Do follow up to the jugalbandi
And for those whose Hindi font is not working:
Kal raat tumhare online aane ka intezaar karta raha
bojhil aankhen tumharee batti ke green hone ki aas dekhti rahi.n
baat to waise kuchh khaas nahi thi
par baat to fir bhi karni thi
din kaise beeta, jab chot lagi -- kyun hansa
yahi sab kahni thi
do baar "thr" bhi maara, socha kahin "always-idle" to nahi.n
koi reply nahi.n aaya to, socha ki ab yahi sahi
shayad aaj tumhara mood nahi.n tha
4 baje wala kohra bhi ghir aaya tha
main aankhen moond neend ka intezaar karta raha
kal raat tumhare online aane ka intezaar karta raha
in bojhil aankhon ko tumse chat karne ki aadat si ho gayi hai.
Jugalbandi:
Since a couple of comments to this blog were poetic, and I made a poetic reply as well, I thought i would include them all as extension to this piece.
Avinash wrote:
pata nahi kyun tumse hi bat karne ka dil tha
janta hoon ham sirf dost hain aur kuch nahi
lekin fir bhi bas intezar karta raha
My reply:
Duniya ke jaalim dastoor bhi ajeeb hain
kaise kaise yaar, kaise kaise raqeeb hain
yahan yeh dil guftgoo ko bekaraar hai
aur ek woh hain jinhe somwaar ka intezaar hai
Anonymous wrote:
mujhe maaf kar dena jo main kal nahi aa paayi..
uljhi thi kuch kaamo me samay tumhe nahi de paayi..
tum soye nahi..kehte ho intazaar karta raha..
mera dil bhi itni vyastata me tumhe yaad karta raha..
My reply:
vyastata mein ulajhi ho ya ulajhano.n mein vyast ho
ek teri yaad ne neend mein khone na diya
aur tum bhi mujhe yaad karti rahi -- inkaar kar nahi sakta
tumhari in hichkiyon ne hi to sone na diya
Sneha wrote:
woh intezaar hi kya jise subah kaa aasra ho...
woh khamoshi hi kya jo bheer mein na goonje...
dil se kuch yun pukaar mere dost ki majboor ho jaaye woh sunne ko...
honsla na haar ek baar fir ping maar ke dekh mere dost...
My reply:
chand ke shor aur suraj ki khamoshi ke beech
apne hosh aur unki madhoshi ke beech
ham aaj bhi usi orange batti ko nihaar rahe hain
aur har doosre ghante unhe ping maar rahe hain
kuch likha hain
ReplyDelete1 aur line :
pata nahi kyun tumse hi bat karne ka dil tha
janta hoon ham sirf dost hain aur kuch nahi
lekin fir bhi bas intezar karta raha
yo yo mango rocks
shit, this is like exactly what I think :O
ReplyDeleteand dont give me that we are more alike than you think line now :x
mujhe maaf kar dena jo main kal nahi aa paayi..
ReplyDeleteuljhi thi kuch kaamo me samay tumhe nahi de paayi..
tum soye nahi..kehte ho intazaar karta raha..
mera dil bhi itni vastata me tumhe yaad karta raha..
aweseome
ReplyDelete:D
this looks like a prayer to a prayer.. if you know what I mean
ReplyDeleteawsome yaar........
ReplyDeletevery nice !!![:)]
ReplyDeletewaise do visit http://bhoolbhuliya.blogspot.com/
....
ReplyDeleteaap aakar chale na jaye, fifa bhi na khel saka..
Sent at 2:43 AM on Sunday
tumhari list me neeche na ho jau, ek dafa bhi "idle" na hua
Sent at 4:15 AM on Sunday
kaash aap aa jate..
Sent at 7:00 AM on Sunday
kaash aap aa jaate
Mango has left the conversation..
Mango is offline..
woh intezaar hi kya jise subah kaa aasra ho...
ReplyDeletewoh khamoshi hi kya jo bheer mein na goonje...
dil se kuch yun pukaar mere dost ki majboor ho jaaye woh sunne ko...
honsla na haar ek baar fir ping maar ke dekh mere dost...
Yo man GO!!!
yo poem and yo comments!! :D
ReplyDelete@avinash (pessimist)
ReplyDeletethanku thanku
congrats for getting the tone of the piece
for the record this is not a romantic desperation thingy ... this one is just about habits ... summed up in the last line ... aadat si ho gayi hai
@myth
not just we two ... aise case mein to we are all alike
@anon
now here is a comment which came out of the blue ... so will the author of this comment please stand up :)
waise a really sweet reply ... after all the best reason is being busy
@phaedrus
again if i had known who you are ...
thanks for awesome
@harsha
ReplyDeletei am believer and hence I pray ... if YOU know wat i mean??
@raju
raju appreciating hindi poetry ... mera likhna safal ho gaya
@gomzee
shukriya ... shukriya
bas aise hi visit karte rahiye
@palkush
ReplyDeletedude ... perhaps the aweksomest comment ... thanku thanku thanku ...
and i can totally understand the fifa thingy :) it goes likes
[FIFA DND]
@sneha
chand ke shor aur suraj ki khamoshi ke beech
apne hosh aur unki madhoshi ke beech
ham aaj bhi usi orange batti ko nihaar rahe hain
aur har doosre ghante unhe ping maar rahe hain
@apurv (fullbloodprince)
ab mere jaisa likhne wala aur aapke jaise padhne wale honge to poem aur comment dono hi awesome honge na !!!
and yes .. a reply to my anonymous admirer is due
ReplyDeletevyastata mein ulajhi ho ya ulajhano.n mein vyast ho
meri neend mein intezaar ho ya intezaar mein neend ho
mujhe tum yaad karti rahi -- inkaar kar nahi sakta
tumhari hichkiyon ne hi to mujhe sone na diya
mast hai bhai....for the first time m seeing comments that are sumthing more than just praise...Anonymous n Sneha(whoever they are) rock :)
ReplyDeletekabhi google kabhi yahoo se bulate ho..
ReplyDeletehar sunday tum keyboard par hi so jaate ho...
baki din tumhe time nahi milta...
MANGO tum yaad bahut aate ho..
umda likha hai... shabhaash [:P]
ReplyDeletedost somwaar mangalwar purane jamane ki bat hain
ReplyDeletekabootar dalkiya gaye waqt ki yad hain
ab somwaar ki jagah green light ka intezaar hain
kaboootar ya dakiya ki jagah ping ka intezaar hain
yep we have all been there.... somehow i feel tht gtalk is yet another tool tht the fairer species wield to tantalise and torture the Y chromosome yielding poor simple beings.... way to go!!!
ReplyDeletePing marat marat abb bhor bhayi
ReplyDeleterahi tu na ghabrana..
par, jiski raah tu dekhat hai..
aajkal woh hamse chat karat hai..
@dead man: Yes it has been kind of an unique commenting series.
ReplyDelete@anon: ... ek aur anon message ... kitne anon messages track karoon ... all i knw about u is that u are a vista user running firefox on a 1280*800 reso.
Mujhe yaad karne ke liye thanku ... but naam to bata dete
@Mangu: Yooooooo. Aapka comment padh ke to ekdum tempo aa jaata ahi likhne ka ... waise aap kyon wirter block mein fanse hain ... kuchh likhiye
@avinash: abe ab apne blog ke liye kuchh lines bacha le
@souvik: i know .. we have all been there done that ... those who havent .. you will be there and do that
@soni: tu bas apne chats pe dhyaan de ... meri raat aur bhor ki chinta chhod :)